1
.
DRAFT
:
Going
on
a
safari
is
A
GOOD
experience
.
The
ANIMALS
and
ENVIRONMENT
are
BEAUTIFUL
.
Be
sure
you
have
a
CAMERA
and
take
lots
of
PICTURES
!
MAIN
IDEA
:
You
should
go
on
a
safari
.
REVISED
:
Going
on
a
safari
is
an
____________________
experience
.
The
____________________
and
____________________
are
____________________
.
Be
sure
you
have
a
camera
with
a
____________________
lens
and
take
lots
of
captivating
____________________
!
2
.
DRAFT
:
COOKING
FOOD
is
not
as
HARD
as
you
might
think
.
All
you
need
is
a
GOOD
POT
and
a
GOOD
RECIPE
.
Make
sure
you
have
EVERYTHING
on
the
list
before
you
start
!
You
can
make
it
your
own
by
CHANGING
the
spices
to
WHAT
YOU
WANT
.
MAIN
IDEA
:
Cooking
is
easy
.
REVISED
:
____________________
____________________
is
not
as
____________________
as
you
might
think
.
All
you
need
is
a
____________________
pot
and
a
____________________
recipe
.
Make
sure
you
have
all
the
____________________
on
the
list
before
you
start
!
You
can
make
it
your
own
by
____________________
the
spices
to
suit
your
____________________
.
